Reviewed by Taylor
SERIES: Proud to be a Vampire
AUTHOR: Alessandra Ebulu
PUBLISHER: Less Than Three Press
LENGTH: 22,000 words
BLURB: Aden is trying to solve the mystery of a drug that rots human innards. Alec is struggling to capture the person responsible for a rash of vampire murders. The only way to solve their separate cases is to team up, but with drugs, vampires, and murder involved even that may not be enough.
So this is a very short story about a witch Aden whose brother was recently murdered, and he’s working as a reporter to solve his brother’s murder, along with other crimes. He’s paired with a vampire Alec, who has been assigned to solve who has been killing vampires.
I don’t even know where to begin. This just needed work all-around.
First, why are the two main characters’ names nearly identical? Same amount of letters, start with ‘A’, and can easily be switched out in a reader’s brain. Confusing and should have been changed in editing.
Second, why did the characters continuously ask questions in their internal thoughts? “What kind of vampire is Alec?” “Who were they dealing with?” “What the hell was the killer searching for?” It was repetitious and lent a juvenile quality to the writing.
Third, that villain and mystery was ludicrous. Seriously. Also, all the details were super vague until the reader got a flood of info-dump. It was always the vampire was guarding “something”, or this must mean “something.” Or even silly lines like, “Utmost respect for the killer code.”
Fourth, insta-love on steroids. Was there even a romance? Was there even character or relationship development? They had met and hung out two times on work-related matters with little to no flirting, and certainly no chemistry, when Aden is talking to his friend about Alec, “I don’t think he wants it, and I can’t force him to accept what he doesn’t want.” Um…what???
So…this needed work for me. It’s short, though, and I’m sure lots of people will find it easy and fun to read.
Taylor rates it –
BUY LINKS: Less Than Three Press
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